The BulletProof Ghost #1 Comic Book Script!
So, apologies, the formatting from the word document didn't quite transfer to the pasting into the blog, but I think you'll still get the gist. This is the most current version of the comic book script, the art for said comic is currently being crowdfunded on Indiegogo.
PAGE ONE (8 panels) Panel 1. The view is from KYLE’S perspective. He is in DILBANE MIDDLE SCHOOL. He is approaching the gymnasium. His vision is a little blurry around the edges. You can’t see any of KYLE’S body. Two large gymnasium doors with the initials DMS adorning the wood under the push bar. 1 KYLE (narration box, different from the later narration box. The later thought box will look more digitized) I HAVE TO SEE HER. I’M… PRETTY SURE… Panel 2. KYLE is looking down. His hands are covered in blood. 1 KYLE (narration box) I’M PRETTY SURE I’M GOING TO DIE. Panel 3. The panel is black, like KYLE went blind. NO DIALOGUE. Panel 4. KYLE’S sight is back, but it’s a little blurrier. He is really close to the push bars on the gym’s doors. He is reaching for the door with his left blood covered hand. Side Note: This is the hand that becomes fully synthetic later on in the comic. 1 KYLE (narration box) I’M STARTING TO FEEL SLEEPY… I… DAMN IT. COME ON, KYLE. I JUST NEED TO SEE HER… BEFORE I GO…
Panel 5. KYLE is looking at his feet. There’s blood all over the floor, running down his legs and pooling around his shoes. 1 KYLE (narration box) IS ALL OF THAT ME? HOLY SHIT… Panel 6. KYLE is pushing the door open. The girls’ gym class is in session. There’s the teacher and about a dozen girls playing basketball. IRENE is in the middle of the group on defense. They are where DMS gym clothes (the outfits were designed in the previous artwork).
NO DIALOGUE. Panel 7. Everyone looks at KYLE (aka the reader). They look shocked and unsure of what to do. One girl has her hands on her mouth. Others are frozen in terror. Irene drops the ball in her hands in shock. KYLE’S vision is getting blurrier still, mostly around the edges of the panel. 1 KYLE (narration box) I MADE IT… I CAN’T BELIEVE… IT…
2 IRENE KYLE?! Panel 8. The panel is twisted on its side. KYLE is falling, so the view should reflect that. He is in mid fall, his legs have given up and his body has fully gone into shock from blood loss. IRENE is sprinting to her dear friend. She is too far to reach him in time, but looks like she is extending her arms to try to catch him none the less. 1 KYLE (narration box) SHIT…
PAGE TWO (5 panels) Panel 1. The panel is black again. No Dialogue. Panel 2. KYLE’S vision is back, but only the center is clear, everything else is indecipherable. He sees IRENE holding him up and crying. She is hysterical. Her face looks like she is scared, worried and panicked. One of her best friends is bleeding to death in her arms at the age of 13. Tears
are streaming down her face. There are people in the blurry haze standing and watching the scene. 1 KYLE (narration box) I CAN’T HEAR HER. I CAN BARELY SEE. I WISH SHE LOOKED HAPPIER… BUT… I’M STILL GLAD. Panel 3. IRENE’S turning her head away while still holding KYLE while he looks up at her. She is closing her eyes tight. She is hyperventilating from the stress.
1 KYLE HEY, IRENE. I’M SORRY. I DIDN’T WANT TO MAKE YOU
CRY. IT’S SELFISH BUT…
Panel 4. IRENE is looking at KYLE now. KYLE’S bloody hand is cradling her face. Her eyes are
staring directly into the reader’s/KYLE’S.
1 KYLE I... NEEDED TO SEE YOU. ONE LAST TIME… I WANTED
TO BE WITH YOU WHEN THE END CAME.
Panel 5. The panel goes black one final time. KYLE has now died. NO DIALOGUE.
PAGE THREE (1 panel)
TITLE PAGE: The BulletProof Ghost: The Trials of Cybernetic Prototype 005
Side Note: The Narration boxes look different from this point in the story. This portion is being told by
KYLE in the future.
Panel 1. CYBERNETIC PROTOTYPE 005 (KYLE) has SYNTHETIC PROTOTYPE 003'S(SYNTH
3) elbow blade an inch from his helmet as if dodging the strike. The panel is tight on PROTOTYPE
005’s upper body. His armor is slightly scratched and scorched. This panel is showcasing the art and
design of KYLE/THE BULLETPROOF GHOST’S armor. This wrist blade on his left arm is extended.
His armor is dented, scratched, burned, but not so damaged that he looks like he can’t fight. His
injuries aren’t that severe as of yet. The two are in an Enviroom. A large room that somewhat
simulates battle situations, this one specifically simulates a forest environment. There are scattered
trees and foliage behind the two warriors.
1 KYLE (digitized narration box) I KNEW I COULD TAKE HIM. I TOOK THE FIRST TWO SYNTHS OUT LIKE THEY WERE NOTHING. THIS ONE IS NO DIFFERENT.
PAGE FOUR (4 panels)
Panel 1. PROTOTYPE FIVE is using his boosters to hover above the ground while gliding backwards
(he’s leaning backwards). One leg is raised with one of his knees bent. The Boosters and stabilizers on
his body/armor are lit up blue. The walls of the room are silver metal with some foliage/moss growing
up from the bottom. There is medium height grass covering the ground with sections dug out or burnt
due to the current fighting. The Synth is swiping with its elbow blade in front of KYLE. It’s cutting
through nearby trees with no effort whatsoever.
1 KYLE (narration box.) MY KINETIC BOOSTERS HAVE COME IN HANDY IN
THESE FIGHTS. MY MOVEMENTS ARE FLUID WHILE
Panel 2. PROTOTYPE FIVE is flying toward the panel/reader in a tight shot that shows the SYNTH 3 in pursuit. FIVE is still facing the SYNTH meaning his back is facing the panel.. 1 KYLE (narration box) AS WELL AS FLYING. SPEEDS APPROACHING AND ABOVE SOUND. SO SAYS... Panel 3. WILLIAM is standing with his arms behind him watching the battle from far away. His black eyes stare past the reader. Concept art in development. I picture him as an evil Brent Spiner from Independence Day. His clothing has multiple cultures of influence including Japanese, Roman and Native American. He has an exposed holster that stores his hand held energy projector/blaster. 1 KYLE (narration box) WILLIAM. MY SO CALLED CREATOR. I KNOW BETTER NOW. I KNOW WHAT KIND OF PERSON HE IS, BUT THEN I ONLY SUSPECTED. Panel 4. SYNTH 3 is striking at PROTOTYPE FIVE with its elbow blade. FIVE is blocking the strike with his wrist blade. Blue sparks jut out from the point of impact. The blades illuminated parts of their armor with a bit more blue due to the strike. 1 KYLE (narration box) MY REFLEXES WERE FAST, BUT I WAS BEING WORN DOWN. I FOUGHT TWO PREVIOUS SYNTHS FOR WILLIAM'S 'TESTS'. THIS ONE WAS GAINING GROUND.
PAGE FIVE (7 panels) Panel 1. PROTOTYPE FIVE'S chest section has a break (damage) in his armor. A wound can be seen through the armor. It is bleeding. 1 KYLE (narration box) THE NANITES, MICROSCOPIC MACHINES, IN MY BLOOD STREAM WERE RECONSTRUCTING MY BODY AS I WAS INJURED. THEY DRAW OFF MY POWER SOURCE, THE MORE I FIGHT AND BECOME INJURED, THE SLOWER THE NANITES WORK AS MY SOURCE IS DRAINED. Panel 2. Same angle, but the wound is partially healed. 1 KYLE (narration box) THE SOURCE IS RENEWABLE, BUT ONLY IF I CAN REST. ONCE IGNITED, MY SOURCE CAN LAST FOREVER.
IN THEORY ANYWAY. Panel 3. This panel is a side view of the two fighting; still in the strength contest of wrist blades. 1 KYLE (narration box) IT KNEW I WAS WEAK. IT KNEW IF IT COULD BREAK
THE BLOCK AND THROW ME TO THE GROUND; THE FIGHT WOULD HAVE BEEN DONE. I WOULD THEN BE KILLED. IF I WERE STUPID ENOUGH TO HAVE KEPT FIGHTING HIM. Panel 4. Close up on SYNTH 3 charging its eye laser. 1 KYLE (narration box) I'M NOT…
Panel 5. The panel shows the SYNTH firing its eye laser, but FIVE angling their blades to intercept the laser, scattering the beam in a dozen directions. The beam going back into its eye is three times as thick as the others, signifying damage. 1 KYLE (narration box) ...STUPID. Panel 6. The SYNTH is firing blasts wildly as its sensors are scrambled. KYLE seems to be moving out of the way of the shots methodically. Gaining access to the robot’s neck.
1 KYLE (narration box) ITS SENSORS WERE OVERWHELMED FOR A PRECIOUS MOMENT. THIS WAS MY ONLY CHANCE
Panel 7. FIVE rushing forward and slicing the SYNTHS head off. There are energy blasts flying past him. NO DIALOGUE
PAGE SIX (5 panels) Panel 1. FIVE has the head of the SYNTH impaled on his blade (no longer glowing so it does slide off due to the kinetic field). FIVE is showing off a bit. The body of the SYNTH is one its knees, going limp due to KYLE not only decapitating it, but impaling its main processor. 1 FIVE: HOW’S THAT? Panel 2. WILLIAM is standing with his hands behind his back walking toward FIVE. 1 WILLIAM: EXCEPTIONAL. BETTER THAN THE OTHERS. Panel 3. Close-up on WILLIAM’S black eyes. Some of his long hair has fallen in his face. 1 WILLIAM: THE OTHERS FAILED. Panel 4. WILLIAM is turned toward a door in the background. FIVE is walking next to him. 1 WILLIAM: ONE MORE TEST AND THEN YOUR REAL TRAINING WILL BEGIN. Panel 5. Close-up on FIVE’S helmet. 1 FIVE: SO YOU’VE SHOWN ME THE BASICS OF MY NEW POWERS... ERR ENHANCEMENTS... BUT DID YOU MAKE ME OLDER OR DID THAT MUCH TIME PASS BY? PAGE SEVEN (3 panels) Panel 1. Side view of William with FIVE next to him. WILLIAM towers over FIVE at about 7 feet tall. 1 WILLIAM: WE WENT THROUGH THIS.
2 KYLE YOU TOLD ME THE GENERALITIES OF ME BEING... ALTERED. I'M CURIOUS ABOUT THE SPECIFICS.
3WILLIAM I BROUGHT YOU HERE 3.5 YEARS AGO. I USED A PROCESS, MOSTLY INVOLVING NANITES TO AGE YOU 12 YEARS IN 2.5 YEARS. THE CYBERNETICS TOOK A YEAR TO INSTALL. MANY HAD TO BE IMPLEMENTED BEFORE THE HEALING NANITES, WHICH REQUIRED HEALING PERIODS. YOU WERE SEDATED AND UNAWARE THROUGH THE ENTIRE PROCESS. I AWOKE YOU, MUCH TO YOUR EXPECTED SHOCK AND AM CURRENTLY SUBJECTING YOU TO THESE TRIALS. OH, AND I INQUIRED WHETHER YOU COULD COMPLETE YOUR FINAL TEST. YOU AGREED TO YOUR FINAL TEST. IF YOU HAD NOT, THEN I MIGHT HAVE HAD TO MOVE ON TO CYBERNETIC PROTOTYPE 006." 2 FIVE: YOU SHOULD HAVE ASKED ME BEFORE GOING THROUGH ALL OF THAT WORK.
3 WILLIAM I HAVE THE SAME NANITES IN MY SYSTEM THAT YOU HAVE. I DO NOT AGE. I HAVE BEEN ALIVE FOR 700 YEARS AND THE 3 YEARS I SPENT ON YOU WOULD BE NOTHING IN MY LIFE. EVERY PROTOTYPE I COMPLETE, I STREAMLINE THE PROCESS AND BECOME MORE EFFICTIENT. I INNOVATE. IF YOUR CONVERSION WAS NOTHING MORE THAN LEARNING EXPERIENCE FOR ME, THEN SO BE IT.
Panel 2. The two are traveling down the hall to another room. WILLIAM is walking with his hands behind his back (his touchpad is in one of his hands, but you can't see it). The hall is silver metal, but with white lit up power strips/conduits on the walls, ceiling and floor. There are symbols in Biodisan adorning certain sections. The angle of the panel is from the front with both characters in frame.PROTOTYPE FIVE is hovering above the floor like he is testing out his kinetic boosters. 1 KYLE: WHERE DID YOU COME FROM? WHERE DID THIS TECHNOLOGY COME FROM? WHY DID YOU DO THIS TO ME?
2 WILLIAM I GAVE YOU A NEW LIFE.
3 KYLE I'M GRATEFUL, EVEN THOUGH I LOOK... DIFFERENT. I DON'T KNOW THE END GAME. Panel 3. WILLIAM has a semi clear circular tablet in his hand. His finger is over a red symbol. 1 WILLIAM: IT ISN'T YOURS TO KNOW. I CREATED YOU. I CAN SHOW YOU AN END GAME IF YOU WANT. THE END GAME WHERE I ACTIVATE THE EXPLOSIVE IN THE BASE OF YOUR FUCKING SPINE.
PAGE EIGHT (3 panels) Panel 1. KYLE has his hands up in a hold it motion with WILLIAM standing in frame, towering over KYLE. 1 FIVE: THERE'S NO NEED FOR THAT. I'LL COMPLETE YOUR
TESTS. 2 WILLIAM: MY PEOPLE EXISTED ON AN ISLAND CONTINENT OVER FIVE HUNDRED YEARS AGO. WE WERE MORE ADVANCED AT THAT MOMENT IN TIME THAN YOU ARE NOW. A VIRUS SWEPT OVER OUR HOME AND I WAS CHARGED TO FIND A SOLUTION